Teacher's Feedback on Draft

When looking back at my first draft for my film opening and comparing it to the mark scheme and the past film openings, I personally think that it is at a Level 2/Low level 3.

My teacher’s feedback for my draft was as follows:

Research and Planning: Level 4
Practical Draft: Low Level 3 (Just)

-        Add all titles – logo etc.

-        Shots work well. Exterior is kept to a minimum – child dialogue is quite good. Shot prior to boy entering house is way too long.

-        Interiors are good. Some aspects of the dark can work – especially when a fright (the masked figure) appears out of it.

-        Sound needs work – sense of doom needs to build – tension needs to increase throughout.

These changes I am already working on and I plan to try to include more transitions in order to make that aspect more creative. I also need to focus on an institution logo and how I can incorporate that into my opening.

Film Opening Draft

This is my draft for my film opening. However, I have not included the institution logo or sound effects (such as the door creaking shut) because some of the footage I was not happy about because the lighting wasn’t bright enough. Also, the section where grandma talks to the children was not included because the wind overpowered the words and shook the camera. I therefore am going to re-shoot most of the footage as soon as possible so that a second draft can be produced – and can be improved accordingly. The inside of the bungalow scene will be much longer because I am going to include shots of the interior of the bungalow – showing tools to make the mood more tense.